Easy:
3,4,11,15,17,20,26,27,29
- Most were direct questions that came straight from reading the text and understanding certain lines.
- Questions that had nothing to do with the text and were purely your own knowledge
Hard:
7,9,10,13,16,18,19,21,22,23,24,25,32,48,53,56,57,59,61
- Questions that had two possible answer were hard to decipher between the two
- main idea questions were a little hard because even though I did read the passage, I thought I would understand it but I would get the purpose or broader scoped questions wrong
- Tone questions are always hard for me because I just don't know tone words or how to apply them in context
- Vocab is also hard for me and the questions about poetic style but I can always broaden my scope. It's not a skill that I have to develop.
- I had difficulty with questions that had one answer that was directly in the text and another that said the same thing but was more abstract. I think I went went the more abstract and got them right.
- Hard for me to relate one passage to another or why one thing was said and the result from that
Dreaded Ones:
-- I had a couple where I thought either all of the answers seemed right or none of them did and I dread those because then it is just a pure guess on which one is the best wrong answer.
- Ones that I absolutely did not know and had no idea because either I didn't understand the question, I didn't find it in the text, or I wrongly interpreted the question.
Essay outlines:
Question 1
Intro:
- expand on prompt of old versus new leisure definitions (general ideas or concepts)
-introduce text and author
- give thesis: New leisure is such a new idea from old leisure that the two are not even considered the same word. There is no sense of the word leisure anymore in the new context whereas in the old it was seen as something with no attachments and individuals could by happily ignorant with their lack of eagerness and knowledge so they could develop their own opinions about the events around them.
Body 1:
- old leisure vs. new leisure
- old= free from others opinions, happy with ignorance, value nature, no obligations, life was not a task
- example: steam-engine, idleness for amusement
- new= having no eager, but eager is within everything so its not possible to have, too opinionated and structured, need to know everything and why things work, genuine serenity and appreciation gone
- "innocent leaders", observed with no hypothesis, lines 18-23, no obligation for church
Body 2:
- expand on techniques used
- personification, rhetorical questions, utilizes both a cynical and critical along with appreciative and reminiscent tone, and third person point of view (helps reader gain understanding of context but loses full emotion of character because just describing)
- examples: gives human qualities to leisure by saying "he", end of passage asks question about explaining the essence of old life, words such as " do not believe them" and "he was a contemplative rather gentlemen" explain both tones
Conclusion:
- restate thesis
-recap points
-close with big idea of whole passage about todays society and tendency to over complicate
Question 2
Intro:
- explain prompt and explain tradition vs. change
- introduce text and author
- thesis: Tradition is hard to change, but what comes from it is ignorance and complacency in a world that is meant to change. A society falls behind and resorts to complete chaos and trust in something they don't even understand when they stick to tradition as seen with the town of Salem.
Body 1:
- tradition based
- explain Salem when stuck to tradition
- examples: innocent individuals being accused (John Proctor and Nurse Rebecca), the criminal (Abigail) getting away with sins, town going into complete anarchy from the abuse of given power (judge Danforth and Reverend Parris)
Body 2:
- change based
- explain Salem after changes happened and transition phase
- examples: John Proctor getting justice, Abigail fleeing but sins acknowledged, questioning of society and what is truth, Reverend Hale trying to do what is right and fixing problem he created
Conclusion:
- restate thesis
- recap points
- Salem was a town that was hurt and corrupt from tradition (ironic) and from change they became infamous in history. The social changes that were made rewired how the town worked and perceived their doings since the incident. Questioning is essential in the continuance of life and if a society is content with tradition then parts of normal life are lost and there is no power to help them fix their ways.
Your first essay was structured well, it seems like if you wanted to write your essay right now, you would have all the key points that the prompt asks for. I'm not too clear on how you are opening your essay if you are going straight into describing the old and new verse and if you are, how? I feel like there could be less repetition of the words old and new, as well. Overall you have good examples and good techniques that should fully explain what the prompt is telling you to do.
ReplyDeleteIn your second essay again I'm not too clear on your opening; maybe it would've been a good idea to write one line summing up how you were going to start it. I thought your hypothesis was really good and your viewpoint of Salem was different than mine when I wrote my essay, which was pretty cool to see how you interpreted the book. In your body you have clear examples but I don't know if there might be a little too much summarization when enplaning the prompt in paragraph one and Salem in paragraph two. It's not very clear on what technique you are going to be analyzing, which is what part of the prompt asked for. Again, overall it's a nice and well-formed essay that I believe will turn into a great and well thought out piece of writing!